Here is the same thought expressed in 'free verse' and two different ways.  I would appreciate your thoughts on which is clearer, which is more appealing to you, and any comments on either.

THE SACRAMENT

and

PRETENDING

In Gethsemane and on the cross

He pretended He was me.

In my daily life and when taking the sacrament

He asks me to pretend I am Him.

Dann J. Flesher

6/4/2017

PRETENDING

In Gethsemane and

On the cross

He pretended 
That He was me.

In my daily life, or

When I pray to our Father, or

When I take the sacrament,

He asks me,

For that moment,

To pretend

That I am Him.

Dann J. Flesher

6/5/2017